Time to heal the wounds

[IBM]

The Horizon marks dawning
Cold whiffing thick mist.
Ravens cry in anguish
For the Romanticism
Perished in the trees

Frozen leaves rustle,
Dew glints in the Shadow
With ashes of the lost battle
For Love which Destiny had doomed

Standing the Monks pray for the soul
Whom rode in search for Hapiness
Imprisioned in Stars by the path
Full of pits and abyss between the Clouds

Failed his conquest
Its time to heal the wounds
But curse will be his memories
Eternal like his pity soul.

 

[person]

Ok grammatically the poem is poor; for instance you spelt happiness incorrectly and you give nouns capital letters when it suits you. Nevertheless the style is good and I think you have talent.

 

[barcafan]

holy sh*t you're dark and mysterious.

 

[Mobbo]

holy $#iT you're dark and mysterious.

dont know if that was meant to be funny but i laughed. keep it up ibm

 

[DaSand]

Did you see the counselor yet IBM?

 

[IBM]

Did you see the counselor yet IBM?

very soon i'll see him.

 

[person]

There is absolutely no point is seeing a counselor - they are not properly trained. If you want to talk to someone your only option is to speak to a psychiatrist who actually has some intelligence.

 

[s.a.f]

A counseller will probably refer him to a phsychiatrist.

 

[Guest]

Did you see the counselor yet IBM?

very soon i'll see him.

if you wouldnt have quoted dasand, that would sound as if you would see god soon....

 

[ginald]

A counseller will probably refer him to a phsychiatrist.

or even a psychiatrist

 

[Guest]

A counseller will probably refer him to a phsychiatrist.

or even a psychiatrist

or even an nw7

 

[ginald]

A counseller will probably refer him to a phsychiatrist.

or even a psychiatrist

or even an nw7

:lol:

who will say: 'son, if i can get thro it, so can you'

:lol:

 

[Guest]

A counseller will probably refer him to a phsychiatrist.

or even a psychiatrist

or even an nw7

:lol:

who will say: 'son, if i can get thro it, so can you'

:lol:

and ibm will throw fruit at him and say "damn the world, damn the beautiful"

 

[IBM]

i met him.

As i wrote in other post lets say no more about wounds and specially about this girl.

 

[person]

A counseller will probably refer him to a phsychiatrist.

or even a psychiatrist

ginald = loser